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chapter07/checkfs.xml

@@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
 <title>Creating the checkfs script</title>
 
 <para>
-Create a new file <filename>/etc/init.d/checkfs</filename> containing
+A new file <filename>/etc/init.d/checkfs</filename> is created containing
 the following:
 </para>
 

chapter07/createdirs.xml

@@ -3,7 +3,7 @@
 
 <para>
 We need to start by creating a few extra directories that are used by
-the boot scripts. Create these directories by running:
+the boot scripts. These directories are created by running:
 </para>
 
 <blockquote><literallayout>

chapter07/fstab.xml

@@ -4,7 +4,7 @@
 <para>
 In order for certain programs to be able to determine where certain
 partitions are supposed to be mounted by default, the /etc/fstab file is
-used. Create a new file <filename>/etc/fstab</filename> containing the
+used. A new file <filename>/etc/fstab</filename> is created containing the
 following:
 </para>
 
@@ -23,8 +23,9 @@ proc /proc proc defaults 0 0
 </literallayout>
 
 <para>
-Replace &lt;LFS-partition designation&gt;, &lt;swap-partition
+&lt;LFS-partition designation&gt;, &lt;swap-partition
-designation&gt; and &lt;fs-type&gt; with the appropriate values
+designation&gt; and &lt;fs-type&gt; have to be replaced with the appropriate
+ values
 (/dev/hda2, /dev/hda5 and reiserfs for example).
 </para>
 

chapter07/functions.xml

@@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
 <title>Creating the functions script</title>
 
 <para>
-Create a new file <filename>/etc/init.d/functions</filename> containing
+A new file <filename>/etc/init.d/functions</filename> is created containing
 the following:
 </para>
 

chapter07/halt.xml

@@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
 <title>Creating the halt script</title>
 
 <para>
-Create a new file <filename>/etc/init.d/halt</filename> containing the
+A new file <filename>/etc/init.d/halt</filename> is created containing the
 following:
 </para>
 

chapter07/loadkeys.xml

@@ -2,9 +2,10 @@
 <title>Creating the loadkeys script</title>
 
 <para>
-You only need to create this script if you don't have a default 101 keys
+A user only needs to create this script if he don't have a default 101 keys
-US keyboard layout. Create a new file 
+US keyboard layout. A new file 
-<filename>/etc/init.d/loadkeys</filename> containing  the following:
+<filename>/etc/init.d/loadkeys</filename> containing  the following has to be
+created:
 </para>
 
 <literallayout>

chapter07/mountfs.xml

@@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
 <title>Creating the mountfs script</title>
 
 <para>
-Create a new file <filename>/etc/init.d/mountfs</filename> containing
+A new file <filename>/etc/init.d/mountfs</filename> is created containing
 the following:
 </para>
 

chapter07/rc.xml

@@ -3,7 +3,7 @@
 
 <para>
 The first main bootscript is the <filename>/etc/init.d/rc</filename> script. 
-Create a new file <filename>/etc/init.d/rc</filename> containing the
+A new file <filename>/etc/init.d/rc</filename> is created containing the
 following: </para>
 
 <literallayout>

chapter07/setclock.xml

@@ -2,20 +2,21 @@
 <title>Creating the setclock script</title>
 
 <para>
-The following script is only for real use when your hardware clock (also
+The following script is only for real use when the hardware clock (also
 known as BIOS or CMOS clock) isn't set to GMT time. The recommended
-setup is setting your hardware clock to GMT and have the time converted
+setup is setting the hardware clock to GMT and having the time converted
-to localtime using the /etc/localtime symbolic link. But if you run an
+to localtime using the /etc/localtime symbolic link. But if an
-OS that doesn't understand a clock set to GMT (most notable are
+OS is run that doesn't understand a clock set to GMT (most notable are
-Microsoft OS'es) you might want to set your clock to localtime so that
+Microsoft OS'es) a user might want to set the clock to localtime so that
 the time is properly displayed on those OS'es. This script will reset
 the kernel time to the hardware clock without converting the time using
 the /etc/localtime symlink.
 </para>
 
 <para>
-If you want to use this script on your system even if you have your
+If a user wants to use this script on the system even if the 
-hardware clock set to GMT, then change the UTC variable below to the
+hardware clock is set to GMT, then the UTC variable below has to be changed
+ to the
 value of <emphasis>1</emphasis>.
 </para>
 
@@ -82,8 +83,9 @@ UTC=1
 </literallayout>
 
 <para>
-If your hardware clock (also known as BIOS or CMOS clock) is not set to
+If the hardware clock (also known as BIOS or CMOS clock) is not set to
-GMT time, than set the UTC variable in the /etc/sysconfig/clock file to
+GMT time, then the UTC variable in the /etc/sysconfig/clock file needs to be 
+set to
 the value <emphasis>0</emphasis> (zero).
 </para>
 

chapter07/symperm.xml

@@ -2,9 +2,9 @@
 <title>Setting up symlinks and permissions</title>
 
 <para>
-Give these files the proper permissions and create the necessary symlinks
+These files get the proper permissions and the necessary symlinks are created
-by running the following commands. If you did not create the loadkeys
+by running the following commands. If a user did not create the loadkeys
-and setclock scripts, make sure you don't type them in the commands
+and setclock scripts, he has to make sure not to type them in the commands
 below.
 </para>
 

chapter07/sysklogd.xml

@@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
 <title>Creating the sysklogd script</title>
 
 <para>
-Create a new file <filename>/etc/init.d/sysklogd</filename> containing
+A new file <filename>/etc/init.d/sysklogd</filename> is created containing
 the following:
 </para>
 

chapter07/template.xml

@@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
 <title>Creating the template script</title>
 
 <para>
-Create a new file <filename>/etc/init.d/template</filename> containing
+A new file <filename>/etc/init.d/template</filename> is created containing
 the following:
 </para>
 

chapter07/usage.xml

@@ -4,7 +4,7 @@
 <para>
 Linux uses a special booting facility named SysVinit. It's based on a
 concept of <emphasis>runlevels</emphasis>. It can be widely different 
-from one system to another, so  don't assume that because things 
+from one system to another, so it can not be assumed that because things 
 worked in &lt;insert distro name&gt; they should work like that in LFS 
 too. LFS has it's own way of doing things, but it respects generally 
 accepted standards.
@@ -14,8 +14,8 @@ accepted standards.
 SysVinit (which we'll call <emphasis>init</emphasis> from now on) works 
 using a runlevels scheme. There are 7 (from 0 to 6) runlevels
 (actually, there are more runlevels but they are for special cases and 
-generally not used. Read the init man page for those details), and each 
+generally not used. The init man page describes those details), and each 
-one of those corresponds to the things you want your computer to do when 
+one of those corresponds to the things the computer is supposed to do when 
 it starts up. The default runlevel is 3. Here are the descriptions of the 
 different runlevels as they are often implemented:
 </para>
@@ -33,7 +33,7 @@ different runlevels as they are often implemented:
 <para>
 The command used to change runlevels is <userinput>init
 &lt;runlevel&gt;</userinput> where &lt;runlevel&gt; is 
-the target runlevel. For example, to reboot the computer, you'd issue
+the target runlevel. For example, to reboot the computer, a user would issue
 the init 6 command. The reboot command is just an alias, as is the halt
 command an alias to init 0.
 </para>
@@ -46,8 +46,9 @@ before any runlevel is executed and runs the scripts listed in
 
 <para>
 There are a number of directories under /etc that look like like rc?.d
-where ? is the number of the runlevel and rcS.d. Take a look at one of 
+where ? is the number of the runlevel and rcS.d. A user might take a look
-them (after you finish this chapter that is, right now there's nothing
+at one of 
+them (after this chapter is finished, right now there's nothing
 there yet). There are a number of symbolic links. Some begin with an K, 
 the others begin with an S, and all of them have three numbers following 
 the initial letter. The K means to stop (kill) a service, and the S means 
@@ -87,22 +88,22 @@ These are descriptions of what the arguments make the scripts do:
 
 <listitem><para>
 <emphasis>reload</emphasis>: The configuration of the service is updated. 
-Use this after you have modified the configuration file of a service, when 
+This is used after the configuration file of a service was modified, when 
-you don't need/want to restart the service.
+the service doesn't need to be restarted.
 </para></listitem>
 
 <listitem><para>
-<emphasis>status</emphasis>: Tells you if the service is running and with 
+<emphasis>status</emphasis>: Tells if the service is running and with 
 which PID's.
 </para></listitem>
 
 </itemizedlist>
 
 <para>
-Feel free to modify the way the boot process works (after all it's your
+Feel free to modify the way the boot process works (after all it's the users
-LFS system, not ours). The files here are just an example of how you
+LFS system, not ours). The files here are just an example of how it can be 
-can do it in a nice way (well what we consider nice anyway. You may
+done 
-hate it).
+in a nice way (well what we consider nice anyway. A user may hate it).
 </para>
 
 </sect1>

chapter08/introduction.xml

@@ -3,8 +3,8 @@
 
 <para>
 This chapter will make LFS bootable. This chapter deals with building a
-new kernel for our new LFS system and adding the proper entries to LILO
+new kernel for the new LFS system and adding the proper entries to LILO
-so that you can select to boot the LFS system at the LILO: prompt.
+so that the LFS system can be selected for booting at the LILO: prompt.
 </para>
 
 </sect1>

chapter08/kernel.xml

@@ -9,9 +9,10 @@ the most recent kernel sources available.
 
 <para>
 Building the kernel involves a few steps: configuring it and compiling
-it. There are a few ways to configure the kernel. If you don't like the
+it. There are a few ways to configure the kernel. If a user doesn't like the
-way this book does it, read the <filename>README</filename> file and find out
+way this book does it, he should read the <filename>README</filename>
-what your other options are. Run the following commands to build the
+file and find out
+what the other options are. The following commands are run to build the
 kernel:
 </para>
 

chapter08/lilo.xml

@@ -3,7 +3,7 @@
 
 <para>
 In order to being able to boot from this partition, we need to update our
-/etc/lilo.conf file. Add the following lines to lilo.conf by running:
+/etc/lilo.conf file. The following lines get added to lilo.conf by running:
 </para>
 
 <literallayout>
@@ -18,12 +18,12 @@ image=/boot/lfskernel
 </literallayout>
 
 <para>
-&lt;partition&gt; must be replaced by your partition's designation (which
+&lt;partition&gt; must be replaced by the partition's designation (which
 would be /dev/hda5 in my case).
 </para>
 
 <para>
-Now update the boot loader by running:
+Now the boot loader gets updated by running:
 </para>
 
 <blockquote><literallayout>

chapter08/reboot.xml

@@ -3,16 +3,16 @@
 
 <para>
 Now that all software has been installed, bootscripts have been created, 
-it's time for you to reboot your computer. Shutdown your system with
+it's time to reboot the computer. The system is shutdown with
-shutdown -r now and reboot into LFS. After the reboot you will have a normal
+shutdown -r now and rebooted into LFS. After the reboot a normal
-login prompt like you have on your normal Linux system (unless you use XDM or
+login prompt like on the normal Linux system comes up (unless XDM or
-some sort of other Display Manger (like KDM - KDE's version of XDM).
+some sort of other Display Manger is used (like KDM - KDE's version of XDM)).
 </para>
 
 <para>
-One thing remains to be done and that's setting up networking. After you
+One thing remains to be done and that's setting up networking. After having
-rebooted and finished the next chapter of this book your LFS system is
+rebooted and finished the next chapter of this book the LFS system is
-ready for use and you can do with it whatever you want.
+ready for use and can be used to do with it whatever is wanted.
 </para>
 
 </sect1>