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chapter01/contactinfo.xml

@@ -2,13 +2,13 @@
 <title>Contact information</title>
 
 <para>
-Direct all your emails to the 
+Direct all emails to the 
 <ulink url="mailto:lfs-discuss@linuxfromscratch.org">lfs-discuss
 </ulink> mailing list preferably.
 </para>
 
 <para>
-If you need to reach Gerard Beekmans personally, send an email to
+If it is needed to reach Gerard Beekmans personally, send an email to
 <ulink url="mailto:gerard@linuxfromscratch.org">
 gerard@linuxfromscratch.org</ulink>
 </para>

chapter01/how.xml

@@ -3,21 +3,21 @@
 
 <para>
 We are going to build the LFS system by using an already installed Linux
-distribution such as Debian, SuSE, Slackware, Mandrake, RedHat, etc. You
+distribution such as Debian, SuSE, Slackware, Mandrake, RedHat, etc. There
-don't need to have any kind of bootdisk. We will use an existing Linux
+is no need to have any kind of bootdisk. We will use an existing Linux
 system as the base (since we need a compiler, linker, text editor, and
 other tools).
 </para>
 
 <para>
-If you don't have Linux installed yet, you won't be able to put this
+If Linux was not installed yet, it is not possible to put this
-book to use right away. I suggest you first install a Linux
+book to use right away. I suggest to first install a Linux
-distribution. It really doesn't matter which one you install. It also 
+distribution. It really doesn't matter which one is installed. It also 
 doesn't need to be the latest version, though it shouldn't be too old. 
-If it is about a year old or newer it should do just fine. You will save 
+If it is about a year old or newer it should do just fine. It will save 
-yourself a lot of trouble if your normal system uses glibc-2.1 or newer. 
+a lot of trouble if your normal system uses glibc-2.1 or newer. 
 Libc5 isn't supported by this book, though it isn't impossible to use a 
-libc5 system if you have no choice.
+libc5 system if there is no choice.
 </para>
 
 </sect1>

chapter01/introduction.xml

@@ -9,8 +9,8 @@ default, and more of those things. I came to realize that when I want to
 be totally satisfied with a Linux system, I have to build my own Linux
 system from scratch, ideally using only the source code. Not using 
 precompiled packages of any kind. No help from some sort of CD-ROM or 
-bootdisk that would install some basic utilities. You would use your current 
+bootdisk that would install some basic utilities. I would use my current 
-Linux system and use that one to build your own.
+Linux system and use that one to build my own.
 </para>
 
 <para>

chapter01/lfsannounce.xml

@@ -2,11 +2,12 @@
 <title>lfs-announce</title>
 
 <para>
-The lfs-announce list is a moderated list. You can subscribe to it, but
+The lfs-announce list is a moderated list. It can be subscribed to, but
 you can't post any messages to this list. This list is used to announce
-new stable releases. If you want to be informed about development
+new stable releases. The lfs-discuss list will carry information about
-releases as well, then you'll have to join the lfs-discuss list. If
+development
-you're already on the lfs-discuss list, there's little use subscribing to
+releases as well. If
+a user is already on the lfs-discuss list, there's little use subscribing to
 this list as well because everything that is posted to the lfs-announce
 list will be posted to the lfs-discuss list as well.
 </para>

chapter01/lfsdiscuss.xml

@@ -3,8 +3,9 @@
 
 <para>
 The lfs-discuss mailing list discusses matters strictly related to the
-LFS-BOOK. If you have problems with the book, want to report a bug or
+LFS-BOOK. If problems with the book come up, a bug or two need to be
-two, or have suggestions to improve the book, use this mailing list.
+reported, or suggestions to improve the book should be made, 
+this mailing list is the right one.
 </para>
 
 <para>

chapter01/lfssecurity.xml

@@ -2,9 +2,9 @@
 <title>lfs-security</title>
 
 <para>
-The lfs-security mailing list discusses security-related matters. If you
+The lfs-security mailing list discusses security-related matters. 
-have security concerns or have heard about a package used by LFS that
+Security concerns or security problems with a package used by LFS,
-has known security problems, you can address that on this list.
+should be addressed on this list.
 </para>
 
 </sect2>

chapter01/othermodes.xml

@@ -2,22 +2,23 @@
 <title>Other list modes</title>
 
 <para>
-The modes you can set yourself to require you to send an email to
+The modes that can be set by a user require to send an email to
 <ulink url="mailto:listar@linuxfromscratch.org">
 listar@linuxfromscratch.org</ulink>. The modes themselves are set by writing
 the appropriate commands in the subject headers of the message.
 </para>
 
 <para>
-As the name implies, the <emphasis>Set command</emphasis> tells you what
+As the name implies, the <emphasis>Set command</emphasis> tells what
 to write to set a mode. The <emphasis>Unset command</emphasis> tells
-you what to write to unset a mode.
+what to write to unset a mode.
 </para>
 
 <para>
-Replace listname in the example subject headers with the listname to which 
+The listname in the example subject headers should be replaced with the 
-you want to apply the mode to. If you want to set more than one mode (to
+listname to which 
-the same list or multiple lists) with one email, you can do so by writing 
+the mode is going to be applied to. If more than one mode is to be set (to
+the same list or multiple lists) with one email, this can be done by writing 
 junk in the subject header like "hello" and then put the commands in the 
 body of the message instead.
 </para>
@@ -33,18 +34,18 @@ Unset command: <emphasis>unset listname digest</emphasis>
 </literallayout>
 
 <para>
-All lists have the digest mode available and you can set yourself to
+All lists have the digest mode available which can be set after a user
-digest mode after you subscribe to a list. Being in digest mode will
+has subscribed to a list. Being in digest mode will
-cause you to stop receiving individual messages as they are posted to
+cause to stop receiving individual messages as they are posted to
-the list and instead you will receive one email daily containing all
+the list and instead send one email daily containing all
 the messages posted to the list during that day.
 </para>
 
 <para>
-There is a second digest mode called digest2. When you are set to this
+There is a second digest mode called digest2. When a user is set to this
-mode you will receive the daily digests but you will also continue to
+mode he will receive the daily digests but will also continue to
 receive the individual messages to the lists as they are posted. To
-set yourself to this mode write <emphasis>digest2</emphasis> instead of
+set this mode <emphasis>digest2</emphasis> has to be written instead of
 <emphasis>digest</emphasis> in the subject header.
 </para>
 
@@ -59,10 +60,10 @@ Unset command: <emphasis>unset listname vacation</emphasis>
 </literallayout>
 
 <para>
-If you are going to be away for a while or wish to stop receiving
+If a user is going to be away for a while or wishes to stop receiving
-messages from the lists but you don't want to unsubscribe, you can set
+messages from the lists but doesn't want to unsubscribe, he can set
-yourself to vacation mode. This has the same effect as unsubscribing
+to vacation mode. This has the same effect as unsubscribing,
-yourself, but you don't have to go through the unsubscribe process and
+but without having to go through the unsubscribe process and
 then later through the subscribe process again.
 </para>
 

chapter01/subscribe.xml

@@ -2,17 +2,18 @@
 <title>How to subscribe?</title>
 
 <para>
-You can subscribe to any of the above-mentioned mailinglists by sending
+Any of the above-mentioned mailinglists can be subscribed to by sending
 an email to <ulink url="mailto:listar@linuxfromscratch.org">
-listar@linuxfromscratch.org</ulink> and write <emphasis>subscribe
+listar@linuxfromscratch.org</ulink> and writing <emphasis>subscribe
 listname</emphasis> as the subject header of the message.
 </para>
 
 <para>
-You can, if you want, subscribe to multiple lists at the same time using
+Multiple lists at the same time can be subscribed to by using
-one email. If you want to do so, write some junk as the subject
+one email. This is done by writing some junk as the subject
-header, something that isn't a valid command like "hello". Then write 
+header, something that isn't a valid command like "hello". Then 
-the subscribe commands in the body of the message. The email will look 
+the subscribe commands need to be in the body of the message.
+ The email will look 
 like:
 </para>
 
@@ -28,10 +29,10 @@ subscribe alfs-discuss
 </literallayout></blockquote>
 
 <para>
-After you have sent the email, the Listar program will send you an
+After the email is sent, the Listar program will reply with an
-email back requesting a confirmation of your subscription request. After
+email requesting a confirmation of the subscription request. After
-you have sent back this confirmation email, Majordomo will send you an
+this confirmation email was sent back, Listar will send an
-email again with the message that you have been subscribed to the
+email again with the message that the user has been subscribed to the
 list(s) along with an introduction message for that particulair list.
 </para>
 

chapter01/unsubscribe.xml

@@ -9,10 +9,10 @@ listname</emphasis> as the subject header of the message.
 </para>
 
 <para>
-You can, if you want, unsubscribe from multiple lists at the same time
+Multiple lists can be unsubscribed at the same time
-using one email. If you want to do so, write some junk as the
+using one email. This is done by writing some junk as the
 subject header, something that isn't a valid command like "hello". Then 
-write the unsubscribe commands in the body of the message. The email 
+the unsubscribe commands come in the body of the message. The email 
 will look like: 
 </para>
 
@@ -28,10 +28,10 @@ unsubscribe alfs-discuss
 </literallayout></blockquote>
 
 <para>
-After you have sent the email, the Listar program will send you an 
+After the email was sent, the Listar program will reply with an  
-email back requesting a confirmation of your unsubscription
+email requesting a confirmation of the unsubscription
-request. After you have sent back this confirmation email, Listar will 
+request. After this confirmation email is sent back, Listar will 
-send you an email again with the message that you have been unsubscribed 
+send an email again with the message that the user has been unsubscribed 
 from the list(s). 
 </para>
 

chapter01/versions.xml

@@ -3,14 +3,14 @@
 
 <para>
 This is LFS-BOOK-&type; version &version; dated &releasedate;. If this 
-version is older than a month you definitely want to take a look at our 
+version is older than a month a newer version might be available for download
-website and check if there is a newer version available for download.
+at the LFS homepage.
 </para>
 
 <para>
-Below you will find a list of our current HTTP and FTP mirror sites as
+Below is a list of our current HTTP and FTP mirror sites as
-of December 19th, 2000. This list might not be accurate anymore. For
+of December 19th, 2000. This list might not be accurate anymore. 
-the latest info check our website at
+The latest info can be found on our website at
 <ulink url="http://www.linuxfromscratch.org">
 http://www.linuxfromscratch.org</ulink>.
 </para>